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Quickshot's Story

Post by Quickshot™ on Thu Jul 29, 2010 8:11 am

Star Wars Republic Commando: The Alone clone and the Army of Trando

Out of the Shadows comes the smoke of death the AA shot. Quickshot™ was alone in a battle where he came through the AA shot. He was ready his blaster was near and the echo of headshot sang through the arena . Menace. Then Anger. Then the darkside. He gets the RTG. Finally after 99 kills he was killed and the last trando and his rocket sat there laughing. When the respawn wave came he had to redo all of it. And finally he was ready he was sneaky stealthy and ready for anything. Hiding and ducking. He ran across the arena. The trando shot his rocket to find out FF was on. A lol was said. The trando shot his rocket and always missed 10 , 20 , 30 , 40 ,70 ,80 ,99 and then Headshot sang loud and Quickshot™ had won.


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Re: Quickshot's Story

Post by Deviss on Thu Jul 29, 2010 10:34 am

Personally, and this is simply the Writer in me coming out, the Title could use some revision.

Also the short story itself could use some heavy editing; putting the correct punctuation where needed and such things.

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Re: Quickshot's Story

Post by foxrock66(Roadkill) on Thu Jul 29, 2010 10:46 am

It's also mega-short. Even for a short story. The idea isn't bad, as duels often make good reading.

For now though, I vote : Taters!

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Re: Quickshot's Story

Post by Quickshot™ on Fri Jul 30, 2010 12:59 pm

This is my rough draft of a prologue for a book :\
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