Re: Andy's Poems

by AndyVC Mon Oct 18, 2010 2:57 pm

the full haiku:

Haiku

As the darkness comes,
Her beauty will take me away,
Back to the heavens.

As the brightness comes,
Her love will guide me to her,
In the cloudless sky’s.

As the eclipse comes,
We are joined together again,
In the light-less sky.

by Gunn3r Mon Oct 18, 2010 6:40 pm

wow thats amazin andy. When i get married u think u could write my vowels for me?

by Deviss Mon Oct 18, 2010 6:50 pm

Ok firstly: you have plenty of time to wait to get Married.

Secondly: you need to write your own Vows, or at least attempt them.

by Gunn3r Mon Oct 18, 2010 6:55 pm

Deviss™ wrote:Ok firstly: you have plenty of time to wait to get Married.

Secondly: you need to write your own Vows, or at least attempt them.

or i could get married in 2 months and have andy right them *ways out the options* so andy how much u charge?

by Rinku Mon Oct 18, 2010 7:03 pm

Deviss™ wrote:Ok firstly: you have plenty of time to wait to get Married.

Secondly: you need to write your own Vows, or at least attempt them.

You don't need to write your vows yourself. It's just that your wife should not find out about it...

by AndyVC Mon Oct 18, 2010 7:07 pm

Rinku wrote:
Deviss™ wrote:Ok firstly: you have plenty of time to wait to get Married.

Secondly: you need to write your own Vows, or at least attempt them.

You don't need to write your vows yourself. It's just that your wife should not find out about it...

sorry guys but i'm with deviss on this one, wedding vows should come from your heart not from someone esles mind.

by Rinku Mon Oct 18, 2010 7:08 pm

AndyVC wrote:
Rinku wrote:
Deviss™ wrote:Ok firstly: you have plenty of time to wait to get Married.

Secondly: you need to write your own Vows, or at least attempt them.

You don't need to write your vows yourself. It's just that your wife should not find out about it...

sorry guys but i'm with deviss on this one, wedding vows should come from your heart not from someone esles mind.

I'm just joking. I mean you wouldn't want your wife to think your a lazy bum who cant even bother to write his wedding vows.

by Gunn3r Mon Oct 18, 2010 7:55 pm

what if she already knows im a lazy bum... jkjk like id be getting married at 16 (as deviss already pointed out) lol

by AndyVC Tue Oct 19, 2010 2:45 pm

Meant To Be

In the land of the Lost, My mind resides,
By a fallen angel, My hearts been stolen,
In the land of the Living, My hollowed soul rests,
By a forgotten memory, My life is disappearing.

Once I saw her, My hollowed soul was woken and Filled,
Time had stopped, She smiled and My heart was returned,
We had talked, My mind was back and Chilled,
Life had caught up, my feelings returned and Burned.

When we were apart, Our hearts ached,
If they tried to stop us, We never gave in,
When we were together, Our hearts were one,
If they separated us, We wouldn't lose hope.

Only now do they see, Why our love was meant to be.

by Gunn3r Tue Oct 19, 2010 4:21 pm

i def like it better with the why at the end instead of the what, did you add to it? it seems better.

by AndyVC Wed Oct 20, 2010 5:58 am

{CCP}Gunn3r wrote:i def like it better with the why at the end instead of the what, did you add to it? it seems better.

I changed nothing, and this one will be criticized i know:

United We Make CCP

Alpha squad,
First, Fast, Large.
When together,
Talkative, Strange, Food-ish.

Beta Squad,
Second, Unique, Healthy.
When together,
Skilled, Calm, Diverse.

Psi squad,
Third, Trained, Snipers.
When together,
Angry, Strong, Rough.

Zeta squad,
Last, Psychopathic, Questioning.
When together,
Silent, Dangerous, Deadly.

Together these squads make the glorious CCP.

by Gunn3r Wed Oct 20, 2010 6:00 am

lolz zeta last psh, XD

by AndyVC Wed Oct 20, 2010 6:04 am

{CCP}Gunn3r wrote:lolz zeta last psh, XD

was going off how it was listed in the squad thread.

by Deviss Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:18 am

The only bit I'm disagreeing with is Psi's part, the last line to be exact.

by Denjie Wed Oct 20, 2010 8:03 am

He got alpha right overall, we're random ppl that no other squad has room for. We rly just dont make sense at all.

by AndyVC Wed Oct 20, 2010 11:28 am

Deviss™ wrote:The only bit I'm disagreeing with is Psi's part, the last line to be exact.

would this be better?

United We Make CCP

Alpha squad,
First, Fast, Large.
When together,
Talkative, Strange, Food-ish.

Beta Squad,
Second, Unique, Healthy.
When together,
Skilled, Calm, Diverse.

Psi squad,
Third, Trained, Snipers.
When together,
Strong, Armed, United.

Zeta squad,
Last, Psychopathic, Questioning.
When together,
Silent, Dangerous, Deadly.

Together these squads make the glorious CCP.

by Denjie Wed Oct 20, 2010 11:35 am

lol, that MIGHT make dev happier. who knows, altho i gotta say, idk if we're food-ish anymore.......... haven't seen carrot in a while and DEFINITELY haven't seen bacon in who knows how long. I think they're gone......... but that's just me.

by AndyVC Wed Oct 20, 2010 11:36 am

Denjie™ wrote:lol, that MIGHT make dev happier. who knows, altho i gotta say, idk if we're food-ish anymore.......... haven't seen carrot in a while and DEFINITELY haven't seen bacon in who knows how long. I think they're gone......... but that's just me.

maybe someone in your squad ate them.

by Rinku Wed Oct 20, 2010 12:50 pm

Deviss wrote:The only bit I'm disagreeing with is Psi's part, the last line to be exact.

I don't know Dev....seems...accurate? Razz

I'm healthy!

by AndyVC Thu Oct 21, 2010 7:54 am

I need to start writing more or else i'll run out:

Lost

My heart aches,
Breaking, Tearing, Bleeding.
I become soul-less,
Ghostly, Emotionless, Deathless.

Your bright day,
Joyous, Sparkling, Happy.
Her wake,
Questions, Mysteries, Wondrous.

Her keen sight,
Sharp, Curious, Loveless.
My wandering body,
Searching, Wishing, Hoping.

We meet,
Strange, Reviving, Happiness.
Our lives,
Long, Loving, Together.

by Deviss Thu Oct 21, 2010 8:37 am

AndyVC wrote:Psi squad,
Third, Trained, Snipers.
When together,
Strong, Armed, United.

Denjie wrote:that MIGHT make dev happier.

Nah that's better, although, and this is just the stickler in me, I would've liked a tidbit about Psi's precision, being the Sniper Squad and all Wink

Nicely done in regards to all your Poetry Andy.

by Butters Thu Oct 21, 2010 9:03 pm

Why don't we just make a thread for everyone to post poetry? lol

by Denjie Thu Oct 21, 2010 9:52 pm

Eh, whatever Dev says. He's in charge of thread monitoring (still dont know how he does it) so yea, up to him. Razz

by AndyVC Sat Oct 23, 2010 5:56 pm

its a good idea for there to be a place for everyone to post there poetry, i'm sure i'm not the only person who writes poems.

My Day

Your voice a sound that brightens my day,
Graceful, Soft and Sweet,
Your thoughts of me,
Clouded, Curious and Nice.

My thunderous heart,
Loud, Pained but Hopeful,
My thoughts of you,
Joyous, Mysterious but Lovely,

Life as it is,
Loud, Denying and Horrible,
Life how I wish,
Quiet, Tranquil and Beautiful.

Life is a challenge,
Long, Hard, Disappointing,
Death is unpleasant,
Quiet, Deciding, Painful.

Life would be better by your side,
Death would be painful without you there,
Many time have you cried{for love},
I hate seeing you in despair cause I care.

by AndyVC Sat Jan 22, 2011 4:30 pm

I know this is some serious necroposting but i started this topic and only recently decided that starting a new topic when i already have one for what i'm posting, would be a waste, even though it goes against the rules a bit. i will start this topic off once again with a poem and declaring that its ok to post on this topic once again because " the creative process can't be rushed "

sorry if this upsets some of the staff members.

Past and Present

Sometimes i sit here remembering the old days,
Joyous, Free and Forgiving.
Sometimes I sit here thinking of you,
Caring, Young and Sweet.

We used to walk these grounds side by side,
Strong, Linked and Safe.
We used to stare into each others eyes,
Happy, Together and Lost.

The days of sadness near you,
Short, Thinning and Faint.
The mask you tore off back then,
Sad, Broken and now Repaired.

My memories of you,
Living, Capturing and Merry.
My feelings for you,
Unflinching, Strong and Lovely.

Memories of you are forever,
Life without you is unbearable,
My mask is back and repelling,
My feelings will never change only strengthen.

I'm only posting my poems again because i want peoples input and not just anyone's i want this family's opinions. sorry deviss and fox if the necroposting angers you, i will take the punishment for it but allow people to post here once again. yes i unlocked it.

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